Project Proposal Feedback

I was extremely nervous before my feedback session with Sebastiane as I has put so much work into it and wanted to confirmation that my FMP idea was strong. I was ecstatic to receive an A2! However I was disappointed to hear my test shoot video did not work in my PDF as I had worked with an IT technician to make sure it worked efficiently. I plan to work out the reason for this to make sure it doesn't happen again. The points made for improvement were:

- Be more clear about what your USP is.

My unique selling point is that the majority of educational films are very academic and finish before college; whereas my film will have a fashion film format to evoke emotion from the viewers from an artistic perspective and it will be targeted at people from 16-21, meaning through and after college.

- Say who will be creating the website.

I want to have full control over the content and design of my website so I will be creating it using either Wix or another service to help promote my educational film.

- Say how you are going to promote the film.

I will be promoting it on a website specifically designed for the film and I will use social media as a platform to gain interest.

I had used Wix.com to create the draft of my website for my project proposal; however Sebastiane recommended I used Muse as it would give me more freedom when designing the layout. I had never heard of this Adobe programme before so I will go to all of John Whalvin's IT classes on building websites to learn and gain confidence in this programme.

Sebastiane's main concern with my educational film was that the dance scenes would be too cliche, with the expressive ballet/contemporary dance style, bright powder paint and beautiful styling. As soon as he said "cliche" I knew exactly what he meant; it was the obvious thing to do to express joy and escapism. I felt slightly embarrassed that I had chosen something that had been done so many times before because I want my work to be unique and innovative. He suggested I looked at other forms of movement to evoke feeling, without it obviously being a form of dance. Sebastiane said I should look at Pina Bausch's work, a German choreographer and dance teacher, as she experimented with modern dance to create innovative dance pieces. He also suggested looking at Om by John Smith, In Absentia by The Brothers Quay and Michael Clarke's choreography dance 1. I will research all of these to gain inspiration from their choreography and unique styles. 

Before receiving my feedback I had already discussed with my dressmaker, Zhane, what I wanted the dancer's styling to look like; however after hearing that it may look cliche I will continue to look at styling inspiration that isn't so obvious. This was disappointing as I had already done so much research and had a meeting with Zhane to discuss the best options; however I completely understood that dressing the ballet dancer in a long, floaty dress was cliche and so I was determined to improve on this. Sebastiane also noticed I had mentioned that I wanted the models/dancer to be comfortable; however he said this should not be a concern of mine and that the restriction or pain of an outfit could add to their movement.